It's kind of hilarious how in two chapters you balanced Midoriyas personality better than most stories including smut stories. A lot of stories completely over exaggerate his shy/muttering side.
Not saying those aren't great, and aren't written well. I just get all excited when I see someone who can balance the gentle side along with his confident more explorative side.
You wrote him in this story with what I like to call, soft confidence.
Huge props on how you wrote that BJ scene... probably my guilty pleasure anytime someone writes Midoriya like that.
And this part right here :
"“Izuku!” I say harshly. He looks up and sees the fiery determination in my eyes. “My. Shorts. Now!” He smiles mischievously biting his bottom lip. I've had it! I reach for the waist of them. He beats me to them and yanks them hard and smooth down to my knees. I yelp at the sudden movement but relax slightly as my frustration eases to something manageable. Instead of taking them all the way off Izuku pushes them to my ankles and then pulls my legs flat. I try to kick my legs to get them off all of the way, but they are still so tired and Izuku stills them. Before I can protest he grips me, his thumbs in the creases of my inner thighs right by my pussy, eyes looking up into mine as if to ask, please? I nod hard and vigorously and he moves in close but instead of licking or touching the wet folds of me he takes a deep breath in through his nose."
Just.... Really good.
I feel like I'm gushing too hard but screw it, I enjoyed this way more than I thought I would.
Thank you Red! I'm glad you enjoyed my interpretation of Midoriya :). Soft confidence is definitely a great way to describe what I was going for. I haven't spent much time writing fiction (mainly academic papers etc) but I have spent many days of my life reading. I'm glad to see it's paid off. When doing anything creative I think we all want to share what we've made and be acknowledged. Thank you for acknowledging me 💕
Also I love gushing so no need to feel awkward, thank you, thank you 🥰!
P. S. I have the next two-ish chapters outlined (with similar lead-up chapter then smut) but it requires some research on my part as it includes cannon and I want it to be a smooth transition.
I have two chapters written! I will be editing them tomorrow and will hopefully add them then as well! After the two I have written/will post I intend at least two more to give us all a nice culmination to their intimacy. Thought I would give you a heads-up ;)
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