there's something about the way you write dialogue and scenarios that feels kinda grounding, like this is an authentic glimpse of day to day life. the reprommening is a sweet idea with a cool name, and lizzy was fun in this chapter. also liked seeing khan stand up for J. hard not to relate to how trapped J feels in a tedious empty life.
favorite part of the chapter is definitely J's switch near the end :3
excited to see more of her system. good work on the chapter
Thank you so much! honestly after attempting to write action stories I realized like after a year I'm more of a slice of life fic writer with dialoguge focus and it makes me happy to hear that! I do wanna say I didn't come up with recommending I'm like 90% sure another fic had that name so I don't wanna take credit for it X)
And I'm glad you caught on to the switch I'm really excited for the next chapter mostly for V laughing at her hideous shirt and I am happy uou Khan in this I didn't really want him as a side character no one talked to or about once and never again lmao and J feeling trapped is definitely something I related to a lot as a kid so pulling from that personal experience 😭
anyways I'll stop talking your ear off tysm for the comment! you inspire me to write so much I hope you stick around for the next chapter!
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