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  1. Account Deleted on Chapter 13 Sat 11 Jan 2025 05:13AM UTC

    That was similar to my reasoning for his name, though my 'Jackal' is a thrill-seeking gambler worker drone. He lives on risk and chance, and he doesn't have the best track record when it comes to playing by the rules. However, when push comes to shove, the odds are usually in his favor. My stuff mostly focuses on his overconfidence, restlessness, and Impulsive side though. He's just a drone with a death wish, his only dream (at least in the beginning) is to live life to the fullest, even if it may have HEAVY costs. He has knowledge on most everyday jobs due to being a job hopper before, Plot.

    His full name is Jackal Allin (All-In) Kickster, he has a light Canadian accent.

    I can make changes if the similarity is too prevalent. just tell me, and I can change it, no biggie (He is my main character after all, so I want him to be original.......or at least as original as he can get)

    [I'll have to read this tomorrow btw as my school really bummed me out...I think I failed my exam so my motivation to do anything is a net 0]

    (I hate how I can't summarize things, but I am yapping a lot due to not wanting a repeat of my 'Modder Drones Records' works, I canned all of them due to them feeling and seeming like a copy of another story so I just want to make sure everything's cool here)

    Last Edited Sat 11 Jan 2025 05:30AM UTC

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    1. Pi_Rat_King on Chapter 13 Sat 11 Jan 2025 11:29AM UTC

      Based on your description, everything should be more than fine. I look forward to reading your story in future.

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      1. Account Deleted on Chapter 13 Sun 12 Jan 2025 11:23PM UTC

        Actually, read the thing and, oh, things are heating up. The visions, the little moments of romance, and the build-up to the action are just '👏' class.

        Also yes, THE BRITISH ARE COMING! I know how to defeat them...Grab Tea, throw it in the harbor.

        Amazing work, and again, I only noticed minor spelling errors, or typos, other than that everything else such as the story is a 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏/10

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        1. Pi_Rat_King on Chapter 13 Mon 13 Jan 2025 03:15AM UTC

          Thank you!

          Though I fear throwing tea might not work on this brit.

          Also I've never written a romance before ever, so the complaints for it mean alot.

          I've always liked when stories involving visions showed them as not entirely reliable, so I made Jackal's a little iffy in terms of accuracy. He also can't control it, wich is one of four reasons he hates sleeping.

          I hope you enjoy future updates and story arcs.

          Last Edited Mon 13 Jan 2025 03:15AM UTC

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          1. Account Deleted on Chapter 13 Mon 13 Jan 2025 10:25AM UTC

            Yeah, you did the iffy parts of the accuracy of the visions well in my eyes, it made it clear that the visions are not 100%, and also

            DARN! I guess a random Brit somewhere else in the universe flopped over dead because they sensed tea in the water!

            Will be waiting for the next one.

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