AHHHH you wrote this so artfully! I loved how you drew parallels between fire and the grid in Ares's mind. I thought that the Dilinger grid design reflected the personality of its maker.
I love the Ares and Eve dynamic, and you wrote this scene so well, it breathes just like them. I so wish Ares didnt just disappear immediately after the fight, but I love how you wrote what had happened if they had stayed.
Also the line about putting the genie back into the lamp was so chef's kiss. Love your writing!
Thank you so much for your compliment and support!
I too loved the utilitarian aesthetics of the Dillinger Grid. The contrast of the reds and blacks absolutely popped on the screen, and I hoped the comparison with fire would do the same here.
It seems a lot of people wished for a longer post-fight exchange between Ares and Eve. Ares disappearing like Batman is cool and all, but I wanted to at least see a kiss! My imagination immediately began trying to fill in the blanks between the key frames starting with Ares and Eve resting against that car and ending with them sharing a first kiss.
To be honest, I was very hesitant to publish this at all, as I haven’t kept up with creative writing like I used to when I was in school, and I’m afraid I’ve lost a step or two in my style and vocabulary by nature of the work I do. It just sucks the soul out of writing. So I didn’t expect anyone to love my writing or to ever describe it as artful, so I’m beaming with joy from your comment!
Right? I understand why Ares left, I do feel like it is in line with his character arc even if its jarring, BUT HE COULDA STAYED AT LEAST ANOTHER MINUTE
Also your writing is refined and is filled with tasteful references, I love it! Don't second guess it!
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