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  1. Mocci_Jiminie on Chapter 1 Wed 12 Jul 2017 10:50PM UTC

    I /really/ like this. It's such a good concept and it's executed wonderfully. But, you may wanna adjust the size of one or two long paragraphs. The longer they are, the harder they become to read. So maybe try splitting the super long ones in half. Other than that, amazing job! Subscribed. <3

    Actually I wanna ask if you have a beta reader, if not I'm totally free - if you're looking that is.

    Anyways, great job on the chapter! I'm super excited to see where this goes.

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    1. theshyauthor on Chapter 1 Tue 18 Jul 2017 06:51PM UTC

      I didn't even realize that the paragraphs are kinda long, thanks for pointing that out! I'll try to work on it. :)

      And I don't have a beta for now, but if you're really interested in it is there a way I can contact you? Tumblr for example? :)

      Thank you for your comment! :D

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      1. Mocci_Jiminie on Chapter 1 Tue 18 Jul 2017 09:43PM UTC

        Sure, Tumblr's great. My handle is @moccijiminie if you wanna chat on there. :D

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