Well done on this story! I must say that this is a wonderful story overall and I find it quite intriguing to read. Many stories I come across fall under the clique catagory, where the main character(s) have an overly tragic backstory, etc.. However, this story is very refreshing and brings hope to the fan-fiction genre as a whole. The characters seem to all have depth to them and the backstories given (short and long) all give the necessary information to allow the character introduced to develop properly. Nothin is made depressing to the point of boredom. It keeps you on your toes! Not every line intrigued me, but that is to be expected. Overall, this story has great potential to evolve into something amazing! Keep it up, improve, and write like you’ve never written before!
Sincerely,
TAOS
P.S. - This chapter (Chapter 2) functions more as a prologue to the actual story than the next chapter to the story. It explains things that occurred before the actual story began in vivid detail. Just a suggestion on my part. Sorry for rambling!
I'm glad you're enjoying the story and plot development this far. While I'm working with a lot of darker themse throughout the piece, I hope they won't be the stereotypical boring events used repeatedly. (Though this story is written mainly for my enjoyment so I'm sure I'll through in some cliches) While I appreciate criticism, I think I should explain that chapter two is not intended to be read before one, even though they fall that way if you were to put them on a timeline. I believe non-linear story telling is incredibly more dynamic and intersting that a sequemce od events format.
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TheArtOfSarcasm on Chapter 2 Fri 23 Feb 2018 09:06PM UTC
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madam_mess on Chapter 2 Sat 24 Feb 2018 02:42AM UTC
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