Comment on Book Three: Phyla-Vell

  1. BloodyMary on Chapter 5 Tue 27 Feb 2018 08:25PM UTC

    Glad you enjoyed the chapter! Moondragon has Genis in a box, and needs the occasional hint that he doesn't really fit into it. (It was about her letting Eros get beaten up before convincing him to talk about Titan.)

    And yes, no one really wants Marv to risk putting on the Negabands again. (And yes, it'd help if someone could see what Eros was thinking. But who knows if they will?)

    Tanalth is bad news. She's really not someone you want to go against. And that's an interesting thought you had about Eros.

    Genis and Melissa are like a basket of puppies. ;) And Rick and Una really have a fun dynamic. :P

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    1. Ilya_Halfelven on Chapter 5 Tue 27 Feb 2018 08:33PM UTC

      I loved the chapter! Heather seems to have a bad habit of consolidating her views on people, and then never changing her mind. She needs to loosen up before she starts losing friends for real, IMO. (Yeah, that was harsh. Idk why she didn't intervene earlier...)
      Good- the Negabands are bad news. (I just hope he is able to recover and doesn't die...)
      I hope Tanalth pays for what she's done! And thanks. ;) (You're not going to tell me if I'm close to the truth, are you? LOL :p )
      Yes to both those statements! I love all four characters. Cuteness and snark are always good to see in a story, particularly when it's as grim as this...

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      1. Shanxara on Chapter 5 Tue 27 Feb 2018 08:50PM UTC

        Heather has occasional moments of learning. ^^ She just needs to hurry and have them more often.

        She didn't intervene because she knew that if Eros answered too fast, there was a real danger of Tanalth believing that it was a lie and that he knew about Mar - which he didn't, so he would have died before she could get an answer from him. She had to decide that it was an answered wrung from him under duress. Heather tried to time it correctly and that caused Eros a good deal of damage.

        Truth is a four letter word :P

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        1. Ilya_Halfelven on Chapter 5 Tue 27 Feb 2018 08:59PM UTC

          True. Don't get me wrong, I like Heather, she's an interesting character, just not a very sympathetic one.

          That makes sense. I can see why Mar-Vell doesn't like it, though- he's not the sort to let anyone get hurt if he thinks it can be avoided. And as this was happening indirectly because of him, it's worse...

          OK LOL. I'll wait and see :p

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          1. BloodyMary on Chapter 5 Tue 27 Feb 2018 09:11PM UTC

            Heather is under a lot of stress right now, so her ngative traits are showing more than usual.

            Pretty much.

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            1. Ilya_Halfelven on Chapter 5 Tue 27 Feb 2018 09:16PM UTC

              Fair enough. Still loved the chapter! Great work from you and Shan. ;)

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