Comment on More Than He Bargained For

1. lovelyenya on Chapter 2 Tue 03 Apr 2018 07:14PM UTC

   

   Thank you so much! You have no idea how motivating it is hearing that from the writer of one of my favorite BillDip works. Please feel free to leave constructive feedback, I’m here for improvement not praise, haha!

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2. 1. AllDressedUpAndNaked on Chapter 2 Tue 03 Apr 2018 08:54PM UTC

      

      You're very welcome. The only things I saw were a few typos, but other than that, content and syntax were great.

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   2. 1. lovelyenya on Chapter 2 Tue 03 Apr 2018 10:09PM UTC

         

         Was it choppy? Like did it have unnecessary words or phrases that made the reading boring/excessive?

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      2. 1. AllDressedUpAndNaked on Chapter 2 Wed 04 Apr 2018 01:48AM UTC

            

            Nope. Not at all. I thought it flowed rather well.

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