Thank you for the critique and analysis! It's greatly appreciated on my part!
I'm aware that this fic has many flaws and I'm too lazy to fix it much of it at this point because most of the entire plot and writing was done spontaneously at the time of writing. Therefore, I'm actually already in the process of rewriting this entire story with actual planning and all. I highly agree that many of the characters and their names do feel out of place and are very difficult to keep track of (kinda was a spur of the moment thing) so I'll likely be scrapping many of the side characters and simplifying much of the scenes.
Currently, I'm still trying to decide the start point of the rewrite. Much of the events that happen in the current plot are heavily linked to the events that happened in the past and I resorted to some extreme cases of loredumping and flashbacks. I'm considering beginning the rewritten version from the start of the timeline in chronological order until I figure out the appropriate storytelling methods to do so because I think I could write an entire mini-fic just for the prequel. It feels like too much info to be kept a mystery for the character's motivations and the plot to make any sense. In short, I'm still a long way from publishing this rewrite because there's still much planning and thinking to do.
Anyway, I also strongly agree that the characters' interactions and personalities are heavily underdeveloped and I will be putting extra attention to it in this rewrite. I've actually been using some of your work on "We are Tenno" as reference for the interactions. I really like how your characters interact without heavily relying on dialogue. By the way, I'm really digging the latest updates.
And about the beta reader or critique partner thing: I've been looking for one for months and I've yet to find anyone so I was wondering if you could be a beta reader for the fic? I'm not well versed in this whole beta reader thing so I was hoping if you could maybe help me along the way because I'm still a newbie to the fanfic community. But it's no problem if you don't want to.
Anyway, thank you so much for the feedback. I'll try to take that into account during the rewriting process and I hope to hear from you soon.
Ah, yeah, plotting versus pantsing. I've tried both styles with original fic (I still pants all my fanfic!) and I've found that at least listing events and how to connect them does help me. It's a very individual process, though! Have you found any methods that are working well for you? I know there's like, Snowflake method, beat sheets, all sorts of stuff.
If you feel like you could write a mini-fic for the prequel, then why not? You could at least structure it like one and then write the main stuff, put it all on the same AO3 story in the end. I'd love to see more of Borealis as he came to be his skeptical self.
WAT as a reference? (=^.^=) Thank you so much on the character interaction and updates. I'm a big character writer, I love having folks interact, and entirely nonverbal characters like Rhino do bring about a good lot of practice. And, of course, ah... diverse personalities, especially with recent stuff.
I'd be happy to beta for you! I noticed you found my tumblr; I'm sure we could work out more details on the mechanics of it there. I don't know how robust AO3's messaging system is, nor if tumblr can send files, but it might work out with private posts or something? Especially with the new color system. Shoot me a message any time!
Comment on Borealis
FrostyEmbers on Chapter 8 Fri 31 Aug 2018 01:58AM UTC
Comment Actions
JaxxCapta on Chapter 8 Fri 31 Aug 2018 03:47AM UTC
Comment Actions