Loved that Lexa thought about how she had to screw up the dart throwing, but then her mask slipped in the closet, lol. I liked how Clarke discovered Lexa's identity, it was like the scenes in action movies :) thought it was awesome. I liked that Clarke was thinking about keeping Lexa's secret in the closet- the past couple of chapters have been good for her character. In a lot of stories, the person with feelings says they won't push- and then they push, it pisses me off. Loved the chapters, thank you, dude. And in the last paragraph of this chapter you have a typo "irratic" (hope I'm not overstepping by pointing it out) .
Thanks for such detailed feedback and you haven't overstepped. I write pretty late at night and often miss some really obvious typos so I'm more than glad you let me know.
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