Eh, I cribbed the numbered dial off 1984, and the idea of torturing somebody before asking any questions from a Hmong Ex-CIA torturer in the comic series Scalped (who, significantly for this story, was a card carrying psycho more concerned with making a mess than extracting information. I'd guess that a relatively small proportion of torture is get the location of bomb attacks out of terrorists, compared to extracting false confessions or just to take out frustration). In the original module the MC only has to watch a prisoner tortured, but I thought Fighter would be quite at odds with the Agency by this time, so I'm painting them a bit blacker than the original story did.
There a lot of stuff in these chapters, but I was a bit concerned whether the romantic scene in chpt 7 went off alright. Can I ask if it was okay, or if not so much, whether you could suggest any improvements? Sorry to put you on the spot, and thanks for reading the story.
Fair enough, thank you for the information. You gave the scenario your own touch nevertheless. As for your question: You needn't be worried about the romantic scene. Fighter and Warrior stayed in character. The discussion cleared some important things for both of them. The overall atmosphere was spiced with some silliness, which works (e.g. remarks such as: "Of course, he had a speech"). There was also an interesting clash between Susan's nightmare and Harry's "toxic dreams". It's good that Harry realizes that such dreams shouldn't be followed. You needn't apologize -- it didn't require much of me to write some commentary. Hopefully, your days are treating you well.
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