SO MUCH GOOD STUFF IS HAPPENING HERE AND YET MY BRAIN CAUGHT ON A LOOP OF YOU IMPLYING MJ HAS LIKED PETER SINCE ELEMENTARY SCHOOL, FOURTH GRADE AT LEAST, AND NOW I CAN'T MOVE ON. You know how important it is to me that she's liked him since before he got bitten by that spider, and this just broke my brain. The implication! Thank you for that.
Your writing is so beautiful here, but this image is going to stick with me: he harsh sunlight bearing down on them, catching her curls, the frizzy bits glowing like a soft halo around her head. It's so wonderful, but it's also so indicative of how much this moment is going to mean to Peter. He comes out of the conversation feeling better. The pain and the grief is still present, but it feels more manageable.
I especially like that he and MJ can bond over being blipped and how weird and traumatic that experience is, but her comforting him about what happened with Tony is genuine because it means something to Peter (and MJ not changing her own opinions about Tony and the damage his actions have caused feels incredibly in character, too. She isn't just all-forgiving because he meant something to Peter, and good acts -- she doesn't know about the battle, either, obviously -- don't cancel out the bad ones or erase the harm that's already been done), and it's palpably different than Ned's. MJ's comfort doesn't come with questions, and there's none of her own ... grief clouding Peter's in that moment? I don't think I'm wording this well, or saying what I want to say, but it's so good.
I love this so much. You are a superstar!!! Take that, blank word document!
AHHHHHH THANK YOU I LOVE YOUUUU!!! i understood what you were trying to say and that’s pretty much what i was going for! thanks for your detailed comment, DO YOU WANNA TALK ABOUT LOVE?!?!?! ❤️❤️❤️❤️
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