Well, a lot of names are similar, I think you could've gotten away with Skyward, but I can see why you thought it was too similar.
I didn't find Starscream at all that self-pitying in teh first chapter. Maybe bitter and crude, but he was not just sitting around feeling sorry for himself. He was pretty intent on making a statement, wasn't he ?
Sleep well, I stil have some hours to go before it's evening here :)
Woo, I edited the start of the first chapter, hopefully it makes more sense now!
I added/edited this;
He wasn’t in space, he was in Iacon Penitentiary. Actual gaol. At least that explained the dream. He'd been on a scientific expedition with his mentor, Skyfire, working towards his post-graduate qualifications - but disaster struck and he'd returned alone, his mentor lost somewhere in the polar ice of a distant planet. Low on fuel and without Skyfire's engines (rated for long distance space travel) it had taken almost a vorn to make it home. Nearly a third of his life. Now he was in a cell. It was beyond unfair; he didn't even have a word for what it was.
The first thing that Starscream had done upon returning to Cybertron was to refuel. Real liquid energon - at a bar. Unfortunately when he tried to pay for it his student credit line was declined. The barkeep been surprisingly understanding about the situation, having Starscream thrown out into the street rather than arrested.
He'd headed to Iacon Science Academy, because his dormatory had long since been occupied by other students. After a few rounds of "Starscream! You're alive! ...Where's Skyfire?" people had started to stare and whisper. This in itself was nothing new, but in no state of mind to deal with it, he'd cleared out his locker and all his research. This (apparently) was theft, since he'd created it using Academy resources. He'd been arrested - but not for the theft. They actually believed he'd killed Skyfire; when he'd nearly died trying to rescue him; when it was the university who wouldn't spare the funds to mount a search party!
Helpful? I will probably read it later and hate it. (Don't say 'who is "they?"' - Starscream is using it to mean "all those bastards who aren't me.")
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