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  1. UnLike_Us on Chapter 1 Mon 17 Feb 2020 11:27AM UTC

    Thanks for your wonderful comment! I loved it!

    When I first wrote this I wanted Cloud's death to be as ridiculous as possible so that it could drive back home the pointlessness of his existence. I see what you mean about not being able to fully appreciate it. I've never thought of it like that, but I guess the readers make up for it. They're reactions to it priceless!

    Actually. I ( at least I think I did) put in a detail about that being the second round that night, so that it wouldn't be the inconceivable for a fertile woman and a lucky sperm to get it done. But I'm glad you suspended your disbelief ;)

    found the section with the detail With another groan the man in the bedroom climaxes for the second time this night

    Yeah. This story chapter in particular I have gone over the course of this story I have gone over again and again to iron out as many of the mistakes that I can pick out. OR the superfluous words. I even spotted one when you quoted the phrase It is at this moment that a sperm fertilizes an egg in the woman's belly. where -moment that a sperm- could do without a -that-. It's not a mistake per say but...

    Thanks for pointing out the typo in the tags! That partiular one with Sephiorth is one I keep making. I think it's a typing thing that my left hand is quicker att pressing don the key han my right. And the dyslexia kicks in when read it. I usually try to have my computer read the text back to me so that I can get around it as much as possible. But there are still a lot of things I miss. My priority though, is to move the story forward even though I cringe terribly at most of the chapters I've already written. These early ones are ok though since I've gone through them so many times. Ah yes. I had a feeling I was spelling that wrong. Kind of makes sense now that you mention it. Because in Swedish (which I speak) it's spelt Ragnarök. So yeah it just lost it's dots. I've just ever heard people pronounce it as with a rock in English so, funny enough google translate pronounces it in the same way in English as the Scandinavian countries. You learn things every day.

    Thank you, I am loving it! The readers are great! The anonymity is really nice too! And the -no taboos, just write whatever whatever about whatever you want offers the biggest sandbox to explore that I have ever seen. well as long as you have the proper rating and warnings, so please point that out if you feel that something should be mentioned.

    Oooh, It's always nice when someone writes a Time! Travel story through someone other than Clouds perspective (I mean, It still has it's charm and I enjoy reading them. But they seems well explored at this point). So please let me know when you post your story. I'll try to let you judge this Sephiroth for yourself. This story for me is more focused on character development. When I started it I hadn't planned on it being very deep, but I couldn't stop myself from turning this into a monster of a story. As is often the case I often wish I could do thing I can't like writing short, funny and
    lighthearted stories, but I'm still enjoying writing this and hopefully you will enjoy reading it 😁

    By the way. When I saw your text I noticed your italics and wondered to myself "how do they do that!?" Then noticed the (plain text with limited HTM (?)) at the top right. Thanks for the clue! I'll explore what that (?) has to share in future.

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