Any kind of comment is ok, right? I don’t even know where to begin, I don’t know how to coherently talk about this...
“But Ran’s still at Moca’s side, looking down at her with a look caught between sadness and concern. Moca can hear it in her voice: she’s so close to asking. So, so close that Moca almost wants to cheer her on. Because all she needs is to be asked once: ‘what do you mean by that?’ and Moca will break open like a melon left too long in the sun.”
The first part kicked me, knocked the wind out of me and kept kicking me when I was already on the ground. The roof, their roof! That stupid bold “But she did.” (obviously not stupid stupid, just stupid in the “it made me hurt” way) Dumber than dumb Sayo-san! Why did she have to be so charming? And Tsugu knew! God, she knew! Gah! All that first part is so good I’ll probably go print it and eat it. (Wait, not like the rest wasn’t good. The bar hopping, the alcohol consumption, the intoxication setting in and how the flood/flow? of Moca’s thoughts changed with it? All of that was freaking great too, but I don’t think that eating that much ink and paper is good)
Wrong Paramore song, but:
“ 'Cause I've lost all my friends
Since they got brand new eyes “
And your Hina? ASSFSHAFSFSGDGD!!! “Boppin’ ‘Round Golden Gai with Hina Hikawa”
No, Moca-chan, not energy drinks mixed with alcohol!
Hmmm... i cant think of anything ive read that had a not-sex-related bathroom scene... different kind of intimacy and exposedness perhaps? Like I would hate it if an earthquake surprised me while in the bathroom but it’s different from how one hates it when people want to talk about their hopeless future in their room... guess ill obsess over this, thanks.
You’ve made something wonderful, and it’s not even over yet!
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Narsakiak on Chapter 1 Sun 26 Jul 2020 08:00PM UTC
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