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  1. DraconicDuelist on Chapter 2 Tue 01 Dec 2020 10:09PM UTC

    Honestly, if that time-loop could be better understood, it could be used to fix extra issues that stack up. The first issue is it seems way too short at the moment, and bigger issue I see is that it may be triggered by the Doctor dying...

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    1. Lunammoon on Chapter 2 Tue 01 Dec 2020 10:58PM UTC

      I'll be 100% honest, I appreciate the review, but I'm not quite sure that I understand what you mean. When you say "issue" do you mean from the point of view of the reader, or from the point of view of Marion.

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      1. DraconicDuelist on Chapter 2 Tue 01 Dec 2020 11:31PM UTC

        Sorry for the confusion! The issue is in the "useability" of the "power" from Marion's perspective.
        If it's a really short time before the loop happens, then no information of real use could be gained in such a limited time as to help change anything. There's an Odd Squad episode I watched with my brother, where every time they tried to escape the loop, they were about 10 seconds short on getting all the necessary parts to do so. No matter how hard they tried, they were just too slow to get to the end. Naturally, they had enough time to work out a different method, but Marion's loop seems way shorter then theirs.
        Technically the possible issue of the Doctor's death being the trigger is more of a moral issue, since getting him to live longer could be down to training or other preparation on his part, but still knowing he died each time the loop hits would take it's toll on Marion...

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        1. Lunammoon on Chapter 2 Tue 01 Dec 2020 11:56PM UTC

          I think I understand your review. IDK how to really say this without spoiling the story, but based on your review, I think you know that the Timeloop is caused by a certain trigger? So I'll the amount of time Marion is sent into the Timeloop has to do with what triggers it. It's also involuntary. In other words, there's a specific way it's triggered and the timeloop only happens when this specific trigger activates and the time loop's length is determined by that trigger.

          I hope that makes sense because IDK how to word it otherwise.

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          1. DraconicDuelist on Chapter 2 Wed 02 Dec 2020 12:32AM UTC

            So the trigger (in a sense) starts a countdown, at the end of which, she's returned to the point a little before it was initially triggered?
            I'd thought it was: events happen, the trigger is (well) triggered, which sends her back to a point where that trigger could be avoided. Which, in this case, would be that the door was locked resulting in the Doctor not escaping and getting "eaten"; so she's sent back to choose to follow him, and therefore break the door down, allowing him to survive.

            I kinda figured it was an involuntary reaction (sort of like an allergy). But even with that kind of stimulus, it's theoretically possible to learn enough about the trigger to intentionally instigate it into occurring, which could then be used to one's advantage. Albeit incredibly difficult, it is possible. Kind of like how that one woman who fell out of an airplane survived due to fire-ants biting her. It wasn't voluntary, but her body's natural reaction to the ant-bites put her in shock enough to save her.

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            1. Lunammoon on Chapter 2 Wed 02 Dec 2020 01:18AM UTC

              What you thought was correct but, considering the trigger is the Doctor dying when he's not supposed to, she can't really trigger that herself.

              You know, outside of the obvious way...

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              1. DraconicDuelist on Chapter 2 Wed 02 Dec 2020 01:52AM UTC

                Yeah, carrying around a weapon specifically geared toward quickly doing-in Time Lords wouldn't be a very good idea, even if she could stomach the thought of it...

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