This was another chapter I wrote long before I figured out where I was going.... And really, it's quite contrived.
I agree. I think romance if built in those little in-between moments, so they are my fave to write. (Which is to admit I need to write better action/adventure sequences in which to insert these scenes.)
Out of curiosity, are you reading in order of publication or the chronological guide?
Oh, that actually reminds me-- that first fight scene between Asaya and Kisame was great. It flowed so well. The beads were a really nice touch, too...I'm excited to see how else she can utilize them.
I'm following the chronological guide! Do you recommend chronological or publication order?
I, too, would like to know what else Asaya can do with the beads. Bit of a spoiler, but I guess I should write something about it, huh? Most of the story they are confiscated by Itachi.
It's entirely up to how you want to read. I've gotten comments saying the story was a little hard to follow since I write/publish out of order. I just like to know what works for people. Some people like the surprise, but my advice is that if you read it by order of publication, you may have to go back and reread sections because it can get confusing.
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