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  1. 4shur4 on Chapter 30 Sun 19 Feb 2023 04:21AM UTC

    Hey, don’t worry. Every comment means a lot to me and the feed back is always welcome. For the chapter; I didn’t notice how much I use the F word until you mentioned but I don’t mind use it or not (English is not my first language so I don’t see f word bomb like a big thing like many people does). I don’t know if it’s more serious or not but I guess changing the writing style affects that feeling and the initial chapters are shorter than the newer ones.

    And for the writing style, I’m still adapting and finding my own style that helps me be more clear and find the better way for the story to flow.

    Thanks and I hope you are having an amazing day as well.

    Last Edited Sun 19 Feb 2023 04:23AM UTC

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    1. Jr (Guest) on Chapter 30 Mon 20 Feb 2023 07:42PM UTC

      I do love your story and I don't hate the most recent chapter however there was some stuff about it that just doesn't entirly sit right with me. I don't necessarily hate the f word itself but the context is used in for example 'they are probably fucking right now' is kinda something I never saw from this story before so it caught me off guard same with the sexuel scenes since I'm used to this story having explicit sexuel parts but there is 2 rather than 1 which also caught me off guard.

      another thing is that I feel this way mainly because I feel that when you said in your first comment that 'bringing character thoughts and feelings more clearly' I feel that you know the more mature and kinda serious feel type route is what your taking and is what you meant by being more clear in the characters thoughts and feelings from now on, and i perfer the lighthearted fluffy style you had before chapter 33 while i do perfer the actual writing style before chapter 29 and sort of in 33, I only say sort because i feel that its giving the illusion that its more serious than it actually is and i might have to simply adjust to it, and a quick example I want to give when I say 'fluffyness' is when dick and zee and zatara and pocus where at the park like that, although I still do appreciate the more serious moments I also do love the lighthearted fluffy of your story that I feel is missing in the newest chapter, again it might just be me getting used to that style of writing again and it looks more serious than it actually is but still.

      Another part is and i feel that this is probably wrong timing is that when you said you where going to be more clear in the characters thoughts and emotions esc, when you posted that new chapter and i saw the bold cursing and more explicit sex i took it as you meant that and you where going to be more mature and kinda serious from now in which isn't bad but I feel like that serious and mature tone was going to be like the new way of this story going forward but then I realized that this story always had cursing, bold words and sexuelness so maybe I was making it more of a problem than it actually is but I still do feel that chapter 33 was abit too serious and mature like it kinda lost that lightheartedness and the fluffyness but then again it could be the writing making it look that way and I still do love that old writing style you brought back but yeah.

      So that's kinda like my thoughts sorry for sounding like I complain no matter what but I definitely grew attached to this story and I perfer the story before chapter 33 but I don't hate 33 I do like the character interactions and bonding and also the scene where zee realized dick loves her no matter how she looks was amazing.

      I love this story and despite my criticisms I still do love your story so I godbless you and have a great day ❤️ 🙏

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    2. Jr (Guest) on Chapter 30 Mon 20 Feb 2023 09:25PM UTC

      Also forgot to mention that this comment was before chapter 34 and 35 so ye

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