Oh, your artwork is just fabulous. I tend to like art at the beginning and end of chapters, but honestly? It's up to you, you're the creator of this little fictional world.
This is definitely off to an explosive start. A gathering of the most powerful people in the universe is definitely the kind of thing that might invite unintentionally, terrorist activity. I'm guessing that's what it is, but...time will tell.
Allura's adventures in being wooed by Altea's eligible bachelor's sounds dreadful. Especially if they are all dullards like Bandor. How can he not know what a juniberry flower is? What a dolt, LOL.
Of course, now that Allura has laid eyes on a certain sexy Galra prince, all those tedious suitors are going to seem really bleh.
Thank you so much for reading and for your lovely comment!! Your observations so spot on 😆 And thank you especially for your feedback about the illustrations, that is much appreciated! I am also leaning more towards having them at the beginning and/or end 😊
I am so glad you were able to find this first chapter fun! You have my absolutely made my day!!!
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