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1. OddyNoxious on Chapter 1 Thu 01 Sep 2016 05:01AM UTC

   

   There is a difference between not having a beta, and not revising. Your story means well, and it's an example of, "Good plan, poor execution." Basically, you lack in concise and fluid sentences, and spacing out the story where you should do so. The main issue I have other wise is not using quotation marks when a character is speaking.

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2. 1. Thefourteenth on Chapter 1 Thu 01 Sep 2016 06:28AM UTC

      

      Thanks for the advice! I am still learning and I find dialogue especially difficult, but I am hoping to improve. Fluid sentences do also trip me up a bit, I'll try and make them more concise as you suggested. Thanks again for the comment, ill take your notes into consideration for the next chapter.

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