Comment on Luz and a Few acts of Anarchy

1. VulcanRider on Chapter 3 Mon 25 Mar 2024 03:26PM UTC

   

   Very fun and well written, Just I advice you to put much more attention to grammar and again to separate more the dialogues for easier Reading. Best of luck with next chapters

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2. 1. Eclipseking22 on Chapter 3 Mon 25 Mar 2024 06:47PM UTC

      

      Thanks I will try doing better with the dialogues should I be separating it more like this
      “Someone talking.”
      “Someone else talking.”
      And not focusing to much on what there doing or sounding while there speaking. Because I don’t quite know what aspect of them you’re referring too.

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   2. 1. VulcanRider on Chapter 3 Mon 25 Mar 2024 07:22PM UTC

         

         Yes, the format Is good, but still descrive if they do something relegant while talking

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      2. 1. Eclipseking22 on Chapter 3 Mon 25 Mar 2024 07:23PM UTC

            

            Ok thanks.

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