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  1. PhareEloise on Chapter 2 Fri 12 Jul 2024 03:49AM UTC

    Oh Neil you insufferable man.

    I *heard* him speak this “No one can keep Sam Houston away from danger. Go on?

    “Why didn’t ye slap me?” he asked, brows furrowing as though he’d surprised himself with his own question. “I deserved it.”
    YES WHY DIDN’T YOU.

    “Do you mean to use that gaze of yours to bore through my skull and discover my secrets?” *snort*

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    1. Darsynia on Chapter 2 Fri 12 Jul 2024 11:57PM UTC

      Eee, I totally watch clips of the show before I write sometimes, I used to do that for my MCU stuff just to remind myself of the vocal cadence, so I appreciate you letting me know it works! My theory about Christy is that she uses mental compartmentalization to deal with things--so leaving her parents behind, especially her prim and proper mother who would hate all of the grime and poverty, led her to kind of lean on that Scarlett O'Hara 'I'll think about that tomorrow' aspect. So, I feel in that moment that she's startled, doesn't want to think about how it felt, but she'd prepared herself for him to deflect and try to get her to leave, meaning that as stubborn as Christy is, she's not going to let him 'win,' there. To the point of basically rationalizing and compartmentalizing away both the scandal of what he's done and the attraction it sparked in her.

      I freely admit certain aspects of this story are... cinematic? Though, I always joke that I write my stories as from the perspective of a cinematic universe, allowing things to conveniently work out or be dramatic, just like I'm writing sequences during Sweeps Week. Thank you again!!

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      1. PhareEloise on Chapter 2 Sat 13 Jul 2024 12:46AM UTC

        I would say you succeeded. The more I read, the more I can't decipher between canon and your fic! You definitely captured the vocal cadence, the rhythm of the writers of the original tv series, the vibe--everything!

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        1. Darsynia on Chapter 2 Sat 13 Jul 2024 12:56AM UTC

          Gosh, thank you so much! I'm twirling tonight :D

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