Comment on The Dream

  1. 8_Navy_Roses Thu 25 Jul 2024 09:53AM UTC

    Hey. Come here, come a little closer and listen. Listen.

    I fucking love experimental writing like this.

    Because sometimes, things can't be explained super well, and this scenario works as something where things can't be fully explained. Like how near the end of their "conversation" they weren't two people in the world, they were in a sense, two concepts floating in unreality(?), and just having them separated by only the format of the text makes those lines blur even more.

    Also I know I say this every time you write, but I adore the Ciela you've written here, who wants to save just one person, and by god is she gonna do it. Like I really do also believe that Ciela is the type of person who will just set fire to places with two raised middle fingers at whoever told her "no" if she believed she could save someone. Which is basically what she did here.

    Also how she was like "I can't love this man for x,y, and z" and then eventually was like "but love 'em anyway to destroy a deity."

    (Also I do adore a morally grey, indifferent Oshus only because he's a God and that's just their nature.)

    "I'm not going to wake up as a seagull am I?" Made me cackle in my car like a loon.

    I also love the open ended nature of this. Who knows what's gonna happen now? Who knows, but Ciela saved her sailor and that's all that matters.

    This comment was all very stream of consciousness but that's only because I'm trying to finish this before work. (I need a job where I can better get away with writing and reading fanfic while on the clock >:/ )

    But to sum it all up, I love this all, the different writing style at the one part and just the whole concept.

    Until next time!
    ~Roses

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