Comment on Jaehaerys The Great

1. Hey_Stardust on Chapter 8 Wed 14 Aug 2024 12:36AM UTC

   

   Interesting idea! Especially when the protagonist questions his sad existence. I would advise you to write the scenes more calmly, for example the summary of the political situation should not be given by the spymaster, it should be the hand of the king, who is that? Viserys?

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2. 1. engel17white on Chapter 8 Thu 19 Jun 2025 06:47AM UTC

      

      y es un poco raro que tenga las reacciones de las otras ciudades tan pronto, seria mas creíble que fuera "conjeturas" sobre sus posibles reacciones

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