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  1. WinrinaFan on Chapter 11 Thu 27 Feb 2025 07:54AM UTC

    god this chapter and series as a whole is so good, but i can't help to feel this chapter feels slightly rushed, the premise is so good but falls short compared to it's development. I'm mostly thinking it could've been developed in a few chapters instead of all happening so fast in a single one with some tease of Renata actually investigating Suki's adventures. Mostly cause the slow progression of certain themes and characters are so good through out the entire story, when something happens this fast it really feels like a massive contrast in tone. What if Renata could be more of a dominating character and blackmail Suki for a bit and that could end up being Suki's first lesbian experience? Maybe Renata wants to fuck Suki's ass with a strap on while her son fucks her pussy, etc.

    Just throwing some ideas and feedback, absolutely love the series so please keep them coming author! oh and a question, is this your only series? first time you write? i definitely speak on behalf of everyone saying that i would love to read more of your work if you some.

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    1. Error409_Conflict on Chapter 11 Thu 27 Feb 2025 11:48AM UTC

      Thanks for the feedback. Your probably right about it being a little rushed, might have gotten a little excited about the premise, but I also kind of wanted the chapter to be a tipping point with Suki trying to fight her urges for a while now that she knows that they exist. It won't go straight into her fucking Samir, if that's what your worried about, the next several chapters will be her trying to keep herself contained.

      Also, I didn't really know how to do the investigation since the pictures from chapter four are pretty clear, and don't quite know how she would've investigated.

      Renata being more dominating and Suki's first lesbian experience are great ideas, will definitely be using them.

      I've written a few things in the Stranger Things fandom, so not sure if these are in your wheelhouse:

      https://archiveofourown.to/works/60927514/chapters/155637067, a mysterious stranger fucking the cast and making them his.

      https://archiveofourown.to/works/61013131, Joyce Byers fucked by vines

      https://archiveofourown.to/works/63282808, Karen Wheeler at a glory hole accidentely blows her son

      Last Edited Thu 27 Feb 2025 12:09PM UTC

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    2. Error409_Conflict on Chapter 11 Mon 03 Mar 2025 02:37PM UTC

      Hey, the new chapter is out. Hopefully it's a little more slow Burny, let me know what you think?

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