Thanks for writing and posting your story! I do have a suggestion regarding formatting. You should space the paragraphs more, there should be a blank line between them, it will make your story much better to read. The actual content is pretty good, just the formatting will make it better.
Im surprised that no one mentioned the thiught of her being a jedi while they were talking about her being a prisoner. The Sith freezing a jedi prisoner in carbonite would be a thought I would have.
Thank you for the suggestion about formatting! I’ll definitely fix that.
As for the idea that they might think she’s a Jedi – that’s actually a really good point, and honestly, I kind of wish I had thought of it myself. That said, I tried to set it up so that the characters don’t really know much about the Malachor temple – only that it’s connected to the Sith and hides "dark secrets". I also tried to describe the place where Nix was found more like an ancient tomb than a prison cell. Also Kanan is generally very cautious when it comes to anything related to the dark side, while Ezra was sensing echoes in the Force without fully understanding who or what he was connecting with. But you’re absolutely right – that kind of assumption could’ve easily come up, and I really appreciate the insight.
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