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  1. noellusion on Chapter 1 Sat 24 May 2025 03:17PM UTC

    you got all their voices down perfectly!! it's like i could hear all the hades voice actors reading this in my head, especially nyx

    "It took so long for the shades to become adjusted to him, especially those few who he had killed."
    this made me laugh, that must be so awkward running into the ghosts of the people you killed in the underworld

    babyzag is so so adorable, and GOOD FATHER hades who is equally protective and teasing with him
    and little hypnos calling asterius "mr. star" 😭 these kids have my whole heart

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    1. Adam29 on Chapter 1 Sat 24 May 2025 11:04PM UTC

      I'm so glad, I'll admit I ahd someone helping me, but they pulled away, and haven't given me a clear answer if they want to keep helping me with it.

      Also, how Theseus can make amends.

      That's why I'm stuck or I'd keep writing.

      I don't suppose you know anyone who could help?

      Lol yeah, the Greek afterlife was super awkward. Even in the paradise but.

      And yeah, we deserve good dad Hades.

      In my verse, he became slightly bad dad cause he's heart broken that Zagreus want sto run off to be with his Olympian family. And panicking about him seeing Persephone.

      Mr. Star I forgot that ^/////^

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      1. noellusion on Chapter 1 Sun 25 May 2025 02:49AM UTC

        ohh that’s tough, you can always go solo

        i sadly don’t have any writer friends but hopefully my ideas in other comment help 🙏

        i can empathize with that hades though, especially after zag is raised in such a loving environment and would want to leave everyone behind

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        1. Adam29 on Chapter 1 Sun 25 May 2025 11:25PM UTC

          Thanks, it is appreciated.

          Yeah, solo, but ut was so gun having like minded someone help.

          ---

          Zagreus challenging the champions.

          "Moo Papa, Ugly Stepdad." Zagreus teased.

          "I heard that!" Theseus said. "You hear the disrespectful tone from this ingrate? Years we've devoted, loving, nurturing and teaching him. And I get labeled ugly."
          "Would you rather he call me ugly?" Asterius jokingly asked in serious tone.
          "Uhhhh." Theseus pales at his fumble.

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          1. noellusion on Chapter 1 Mon 26 May 2025 06:02AM UTC

            UGLY STEPDAD 😭
            this kid has had it out for him from the start
            love how easily asterius just shuts theseus down

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            1. Adam29 on Chapter 1 Mon 26 May 2025 03:47PM UTC

              But it's all ib fun, they know it.

              Theseus struke down and bursts into blue sparkles.

              "Well done, my prince." Theseus calls out.

              "Little star, you shined brightly this night." Asterius goes next.

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              Or asterius defeated first

              "I see I must apply discipline to a unruly babe!" Theseus scolds.

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              As child growing up, Zagreus will wobble to cling to Theseus leg, growling and pretend to bite him.

              Theseus lifts up his leg and pretends to shake Zagreus off.

              "Darn wretched vermin get bigger every day." Theseus jokes as Asterius stands ready if Zagreus falls.

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              1. noellusion on Chapter 1 Mon 26 May 2025 06:23PM UTC

                oh he’s definitely a biter

                i imagine he’d purposely step on theseus’s toes with those fire feet of his, theseus might have to start wearing shoes

                the last line 😭 at least he’s a cute vermin

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                1. Adam29 on Chapter 1 Wed 28 May 2025 12:59AM UTC

                  Lol Yes, warm feet, but I think it's like fresh toast out of toaster warm, also, they're dead so they have resistance to pain maybe?

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                  1. noellusion on Chapter 1 Thu 29 May 2025 05:25AM UTC

                    oh good point. but i mean theseus is dead and im sure that nipple twist didn’t feel too great lol

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                    1. Adam29 on Chapter 1 Thu 29 May 2025 06:20PM UTC

                      Oh, right, well, a resistance is not totally immune lol

                      And zagreus is a god, so that's circumvent lol

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