Comment on Moon Gazing

  1. Shoot_D_Archer on Chapter 1 Sun 29 Jun 2025 09:42AM UTC

    Holy hell man this was really good! its rare for me to cry at all but this got me a lil teary eyed and that says a lot!

    I loved the flashback of J and Tessa, it felt so warm so cozy the contrast of cutting back to the cold reality and realization that J broke her promise and failed Tessa, HURT DUDE

    Just the whole part of her hallucinating and thinking she is talking to Tessa, admitting how she failed and that she is sorry, talking about N and V being happy and safe now UGH ITS SO GOOD AND THE "Are you here to take me home?" SHIT THAT GOT ME GOOD, LITERAL CHILLS

    My mouth was left hanging open when Uzi shot her, I truly wasnt expecting that to happen to the point that my brain didnt even process it at first, not until it cut to Uzi holding the revolver, I was honestly as shocked and caught off guard as J, and the fact that it was Tessas revolver, the one bulet coment it all just- god it was really good, honestly as sad as this was one might argue that dying and getting to be with Tessa again was the closest this J would get to a happy ending.

    As for the others Uzi being the one to kill J makes sense, i really doubt N or V would gather up the courage to do it, Uzi on the other hand doesn't really know J so while killing her is gonna stay with her for a while, she will definitely handle it better then if it were the other two

    N I really like how you wrote him here, he knows J wasnt good to them but she definitely didnt deserve the ending she got, I like that he calls V out on her hypocrisy and actually stood his ground, i am assuming that while he was prepared for the worst he really hoped that they would talk things out and make up, the fact that this situation could have ended differently had they looked for her sooner, man the "what if"s are gonna hunt them all

    and finally V

    I saw someone already talked about Vs reaction to Js passing and i agree with you both in that i wish we could have seen her true feelings but also with Vs character she would definitely try to pretend she didnt care until she would find a place to be alone and let it all out.

    The one bit of criticism i have is when V said J had her chance to change, unless you wrote it from Vs point of view, i can definitely see her believe that, Vs character flaw is that she is kind of a hypocrite.

    In reality tho, J didnt have much of a chance at all, she died in the pilot and was stuck all alone with the solver while N and V got closer to Uzi and believed that they had a chance to win, J knows next to nothing about Uzi so she had no reason to think that one worker drone with solver powers can win against THE Solver, the solver was also Js admin so it could have taken control of her any time it wanted if she had joined them.

    I love Jessa, they are such a good ship and there are so many different situations you can put them in, thanks for writing this and showing us another way things could end, cant wait for part two!

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