So, first things first, I must have my usual artist to make art of Number C83 so as to celebrate the new, uh...uh...hmmmm...
Dangit man, you ended up hitting one of my big likes with that design. CURSE YOU!
Anywho, the meat of the chapter. Yuma sees the Door again! ...I forget, did he view it when dueling the fortune-teller guy? *Looks at 'pedia* Nerp. So yay, it's back!
Akari getting Yuma over to Fuya, alright, alright, give the uh...okay need to describe her in a non-perverted manner...YOU DID THIS THANKS TO CHAOS GALAXY QUEEN! But hey, no joke, getting her actively involved with the plot again is a real step-up from before. Seriously, it ain't hard to connect stuff!
Now for the fight against Fuya as we see the combat against a sentient Number (and not a comedic pullback). Fuya being completely deluded is honestly sad...and then oh...wait, his MOM has a backstory?! And one that makes sense given how cut-throat showbusiness is?! ...Damn, was Fuya a misplaced GX or ARC-V opponent? Seriously, nice touch.
Duel itself just flatout retrained the TERRIBLE GARBAGE THAT WOULD LOSE TO UNO CARDS. Seriously, if Konami is taking inspiration from Rata (it was thanks to him that we got a Polymerization for Field Spells), then we need an Uno Xyz archetype to beat up the real-life Sparrow cards! Also you added actual lore to this in-universe show, and that earns a hat-off! Nice work.
But nothing brought me greater joy than you using base Chaos Xyz Evolution to COUNTER RUM Xyz Evolution. Canon literally never did that, even when Number C39 fought against Number C105. ...Might want to rewatch the subs on that one; don't think Alito is one to care about that sort of thing-explain how different power-ups work and his eyes will glaze over unless you show him in a duel. He really was a unique antagonist that we haven't gotten since. Why'd he have to get brainwashed? They didn't need it!
The one negative on the chapter...is the grammar. Since I wasn't here to check it thanks to being out on Orders. The joy of being military. It's about the one thing that kind of breaks my immersion. I'm a grammar guy, it's just gonna be how things are. Obviously it's not all terrible, but there were points in the prose I would have liked to go over.
Even so, this was more than a worthy addition! Keep it up!
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EpsilonTarantula on Chapter 15 Mon 30 Jun 2025 07:16PM UTC
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