This comment's been a long time coming. I ADORE this fic and this premise. Something about this is so very comforting and soothing. I come to this SO often so it's only fair I leave a comment 😆 From the get go I'm blasted by your lovely scene setting. I adore how much depth and history you manage to add into a short introduction. We got so much about Becca's love for christmas, family and how her life's changed with the time from the get go. The show could never!!
"exuding entire clouds of Chanel" this visual is making me cackle.
Ahhh your writing flows SO well here, I love the interaction with Madelyn and the little "Alright, very good standing with the company. Great!" just Becca having a good time and things going well for her is so precious to me. And her & billy's relationship is so adorable. All the cozy vibes and love is just so incredibly heart-warming. Always nice to see a nice side to butcher 😂
I love how you balance direct dialogue and just nodding to something in passing. I'm taking all the notes! Rather than write out how we've all seen the scene to go (like I feel I'd gravitate towards doing) you focus on all the extra details we don't see - love that! very immersive! Oh oh oh!! also you have everyone's voices SPOT ON! It's so impressively well written! I really could just ooh aah at every sentence but I'm trying to keep my notes semi-eloquent at least.
"The only thing Becca is mentally doing now is turning in her two-weeks and waving her job goodbye." is another fantastic line that made me laugh. The image of Becca having a mental crisis while Billy just tips Homelander a glass is hilarious. This interaction and conversation between them all is funny and hot at the same time. I love the effortlessness of your dialogue, it reads smoothly, like I'm just reading a transcript of the show. I love his awkwardness and the "did you mean that?" while Billy couldn't care less about how they're both perceived. Homelander's manicured persona is the most interesting when it's met with someone who's crass and doesn't care for all the pomp.
Also I love the canon christmas scene as is, and yet you ELEVATE it!!! You write him so sweet and pretty in this, all fond eyes and sheepish smiles. I just wanna pinch his cheeks in this!!! (both sets of cheeks ofc) I'm also really enjoying the way you wrote out the scene here. I know I'm just reiterating the same point but I can't get over how well you write dialogue! I just adore all of this. I mean it when I say that this is my comfort fic! Again - a crime that it's taken me this long to glaze you up for it!
God damn, like a light switch this all went from cutesy and fun to hot! The atmosphere is thick and sultry, I'm loving the scene being set here. Becca and Butcher just having their rituals and just loving each other above all is so fun to see. Butcher spoiling his girl and making her (kinda) dreams come true is top notch. "maybe eat him out" my ass... (well his ass)
His awkward arrival is perfect, really puts into perspective how painfully human he is. Feeling awkward at 'first dates' just like everyone else. The wine was a really nice touch! I wonder whether he thought of it or if Maeve was in his ear about this (beyond her approval - though I imagine she was just happy to have him gone for one night at least) at all.
It's perfectly normal to be nervous for a threesome with 2 strangers you've literally just met but I would love to see inside his head. (though I love that this is from Becca's POV) but is he nervous about how he's perceived and how he'll perform or is he worried about being with humans and losing control? Or all the above? It's just a really fun and new scenario for him to be in (which I feel like even with his clean brand you'd think he'd have had more experiences like this yet somehow he keeps to being a good boy scout)
Ahhhh her leading the kiss and just feeling him melt underneath her IS SO GOOD!!! the direction, the praise, everything about this is just so effortlessly hot. What I really love about your style is that it just feels to the point. You're giving it like it is. I just think it works so well and I'm in love!!
I'm so glad that you did actually have them undress him out of the monstrosity and have billy kindly hang it up. Something about the ritual of it all amidst something new and exciting feels grounding and realistic! Even though the energy is electric it's not like 'clothes flying across the room' cliche? And I looove how butcher managed to get his thoughts spinning the right way about undressing him. (the show did us dirty, I WANT THIS TO BE REAL - again, thank you for writing the best thing ever)
He's such a puppy in this honestly, everything has his eyes going wide. It's kind of precious honestly. (kind of a lot)
Parts like these I really enjoy: ""You… smoke? Recreationally?" There it is again, that voice that sounds like he's saying something rehearsed. What an endearing habit when he's nervous. Must be the actor training kicking in." The wanting to make a good impression so he's gotta be good and rehearsed in what he says back when he was more subdued is like crack to me.
Back to the backstory and character work, this is one of my favourite parts: "She wonders briefly if he also panicked when he saw that big 3 appear in front of his age, the way she did earlier this year. 30 means growing up, doesn't it? Not smoking pot in her bedroom and running barefoot down the stairs to get Cheetos." It's just a little throwaway line that I feel just adds so much. Like I'm not just reading this for the porn 😂 idk, her trying to connect with him on something they've got in common while in reality being none the wiser to his actual self/upbringing is a nice note.
His little self-assuring "I can do whatever I want" is so well placed. You just translate his odd-ness through another person's eye so well!
oh my lordddddddd, this is smoking hot. wowowowow. this is the part where I could just ooh and aaah at every sentence (as if the rest of this wasn't) but having him fit well within their rhythm is sooo fun with his 'always needing to please' self. I'm sure he'd bust if he heard her say all that.
Also I love when fics include some realistic sex. Like yeah she's not gonna be having 100 orgasms in a row, thank you 😂 not that I don't like reading that but this was a refreshing little fun tidbit to come across!!
Whew, butcher taking the lead there and low-key fucking them both is a revolutionary idea, I'm obsessed with this. I usually headcanon that homelander's never had sex with anyone who's actually been super into it too. So I imagine he's learned to be good so that they don't have the time to think to leave earlier before he's done, so here to have 2 people at the same time telling him that he's wanted there essentially no matter how they do it is 🤌🤌🤌 also them ending it off with a little cuddle is great (which I also don't believe Maeve has ever done, and if she has it was once or twice - she's legging it asap 😂)
ANWYAY this was beyond insane, obsessed and in love with this premise and I love everything about this story, thank you for sharing! I was barely coherent in most of this but just take this as me bowing before the master because you're a fantastic writer!
Dee, I have no clue how to respond to this comment. They were not kidding on Discord, that is... that is a raving review. I can only say 'thank you' in tears because nothing else conveys my gratitude.
I'm happy my writing style works for you. I always feel like I am on too many tangents to have a coherent narrative, so I am happy to hear my tangents do work. And come across as good characterization even. Insane.
To answer your question about why Homelander behaves awkwardly: def because he has no script to fall back on. He is very nervous about being perceived as desirable by a couple who apparently has threesomes regularly - and also with a man in the picture, which is novel. He is a fish out of water and it's good the Butcher take such sweet care of him.
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