Comment on Howl of the Heart

  1. Mewleenya on Chapter 1 Sat 13 Sep 2025 07:37PM UTC

    Alright, onto the text.
    Your prose is excellent, though at times it feels like there’s a bit of an overload of descriptions that might not be entirely necessary. I mean, they definitely add to the atmosphere, but maybe the tension in the scene would benefit from focusing on something else in that moment. You know what I mean? Take this as just a suggestion that you can totally ignore, it’s a matter of style.
    The further I read, the more intrigued and excited I felt. The castle feels like the complete antithesis of March’s life with her family.
    It’s jarring to see March so downcast right from the start. Do you plan to eventually make her as cheerful as she is on the Express? Or, well… as she used to be before Amphoreus.
    And then there’s Caelus. If he really is as heartless as they say, will she be able to open up to him? Aaah, so many questions, I can barely contain myself! I’ve only read the first chapter, but I’m already dying to know why March is rejected by her family and if she’ll truly find her place here. At this point, I just want nothing but warmth and tenderness for her and her life going forward. 🥹
    I’ll save the next chapter for tonight. This is something that deserves to be savored slowly.
    Thank you so much for writing this 😭

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    1. TheEmptyCup on Chapter 1 Sun 21 Sep 2025 04:32PM UTC

      Thank you so much for your input—I really do look for ways to improve, so I appreciate the feedback! March will definitely regain her confidence and bubbly personality as the story goes on, though what happened with Amphoreus will stay very relevant too 😉 I’m glad you’re savoring it, that honestly means a lot 🥹💜.

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