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  1. corduroi on Chapter 9 Sun 25 May 2025 04:43PM UTC

    Thank you ^_^! An early congrats for your graduation, too!
    I think that's really interesting because i had no intention to write Evan that way (i don't have autism myself). i've actually considered it though, so your interpretation makes a lot of sense! also, when you say Elizabeth acted randomly i assume you're probably talking about when she "shook her head" at Mike? correct me if i'm wrong! there's a lot i could talk about, but i'd rather not ramble before i've even properly introduced her :p. i have a feeling her actions might make more sense in later chapters once i've explored her relationship to her father
    Again thanks!! i'm glad you liked it!!

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    1. AirQuotes2962 on Chapter 9 Sun 25 May 2025 08:03PM UTC

      Oohhhhhh....wait. I just reread that scene. That was actually William talking, wasn't it? I assumed it was Elizabeth since it mentioned her right before someone started tearing into Mike but it was probably Willy.

      That makes sense. The way that person was tearing into Mike felt a lot more like how Willy talks. Elizabeth was just the only person it directly mentioned, so I assumed it had to be her.

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      1. corduroi on Chapter 9 Sun 25 May 2025 08:23PM UTC

        it was William! Now that you bring it up, i see how to lack of dialogue tags make it ambiguous. i added one just now.

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